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Loud house:FLE (test edition):Deuces Wild!
[Johnny and Clyde are running into Lincoln's room holding comic books in their hands]
Johnny: [sniffs his comic] "Ah.i love the smell of fresh comics in the morning
."
Clyde: [sniffs his comic] "Mmm. It's like recycled paper and justice."
[In the hallway, a mysterious essence comes in and passes by Clyde's nose]
Clyde: [smells the stench] "Ugh! What is that smell? It's like sauerkraut and hot garbage!"
Johnny: [fanning the stench away] "There's only one way to find out: we'll have to investigate..." [holds up an Ace of Spades and poses heroically] "...it Johnny time!"
[The ace of Spades wipes to the city at night as Johnny as johnny X and Clyde as One-Eyed Jack enter the crime scene]
Clyde: "The gas is everywhere! There's no way to tell which direction it's-" [steps in something; disgusted] "Ugh." [picks up what he stepped in] "I seem to have stepped in some sort of lumpy, viscous ooze!" [points to a trail of the stuff] "Look!"
Lincoln: "Follow that green stuff!"
[They follow it]
Clyde
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Loud house FLE (test edition):Slice of Life
(we open on a scene Johnny reading from one of Lincoln's manga comics; two characters are having a confrontation, and they "speak" in johnny's voice)
CHARACTER #1: "If we cannot decide who gets the triforce,then we must..."
CHARACTER #2: "BATTLE YOU FOOL!!!"
(the two characters power up and leap toward a pizza-shaped artifact and shout "YAAAHHHHHHH!!" as the caption is spelled out)
(cut to Johnny on his bed reading a manga comic)
Johnny: "Ah,it nice and I not should here but? living here with this people it nice."
RITA: (offscreen) "KIDS! PIZZA'S HERE!"
(cut to an exterior view of the house; a pizza delivery truck with a sign that says "DELIVERY IN 30 MINUTES OR ELSE" is seen driving away)
(cut to Johnny walking down the stairway)
johnny:"pizza cowabunga..."
(Johnny moves to the side of the stairway to avoid his sisters stampeding down; Lana then comes sliding down the banister)
LORI, LENI, LUNA, LOLA, LISA, LYNN, LUCY, AND LUAN: "PIZZA!!!"
LANA: "OOH, PIZZA PIZZA PIZZA, YEEES!"
Johnny
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Loud house:fle (test edition):Bathroom break!!
[open up to a photo of a boy and ten girls who are his sisters around him; all except one of them are smiling]
Johnny test: [to the viewers] "wonder to your self how I even got here? possible Susan and Mary send me to alternative universe or dimension what ever this place is? is no good" [opens door]
[Outside his room, there is much chaos going on caused by his sisters; such as a baby playing with pots and pans, one sister reading a poem, one sister dressed up like a mummy in some white cloth substance chasing another sister wearing a pretty dress who is screaming in terror, one sister playing Football in the house, one sister angrily chasing another grinning sister through the halls, and one sister playing on a guitar]
Johnny test: "Welcome to...I don't known where i am?"
[Depending on which version of the pilot you see, the title may or may not show up]
Johnny test: [closes door and stretches a little] "first thing first I needing plan do get out this place soon here with this people
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WOW! having uploaded everything like month's now for reason get some writing projects to around it & building YouTube channel,Done nothing on Deviantart well that all change so starting review, going review some media like animation & anime,movie's,gaming, book's & alongs tops 10,poem's,Journal,Literature writing all that stuff meantime,beside writing big plan possible in 2018 started doing SFM (Source Filmmaker) starting 3D animation,voice action doing now still precise on it need lesson & inspiration from my favorite voice actors & actress's & finally starting sprite series call "Virtual" going upload on YouTube & Newgrounds. now don't have nothing yet but don't worry try kept you Guy's update with journals,for now changed up Deviantart see you Guy's at next journal (if I can manage to so).
  • Listening to: ozzy osbourne,metallica,drowning pool,five finger
  • Reading: a girl in parts and speak
  • Watching: V for Vendetta and watchmen
  • Playing: for honor,doom and gears of war
  • Eating: Noting
  • Drinking: Monster Energy
[Johnny and Clyde are running into Lincoln's room holding comic books in their hands]
Johnny: [sniffs his comic] "Ah.i love the smell of fresh comics in the morning
."
Clyde: [sniffs his comic] "Mmm. It's like recycled paper and justice."
[In the hallway, a mysterious essence comes in and passes by Clyde's nose]
Clyde: [smells the stench] "Ugh! What is that smell? It's like sauerkraut and hot garbage!"
Johnny: [fanning the stench away] "There's only one way to find out: we'll have to investigate..." [holds up an Ace of Spades and poses heroically] "...it Johnny time!"
[The ace of Spades wipes to the city at night as Johnny as johnny X and Clyde as One-Eyed Jack enter the crime scene]
Clyde: "The gas is everywhere! There's no way to tell which direction it's-" [steps in something; disgusted] "Ugh." [picks up what he stepped in] "I seem to have stepped in some sort of lumpy, viscous ooze!" [points to a trail of the stuff] "Look!"
Lincoln: "Follow that green stuff!"
[They follow it]
Clyde: [holding his nose] "The gas is thicker here."
Johnny: "some monster made of dirty gus. Keep a sharp eye out, Jack!"
Clyde: [points to his eyepatch] "I'm way ahead of you."
[They continue to follow the trail to an alley to reveal the culprit: a giant sentient gas cloud]
Clyde: "A giant gas monster! I should have recognized its foul stench!"
Johnny:[holds out some cards] "OK bub I give you simply choose let do this hard way or my way your choose?"
Johnny and Clyde: [leaping into action] "YAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!" [literally pass the gas and hit the wall] "Oof!"
[They fall off the wall and back into the stench]
Clyde: [gasps] "We pierced right through him!"
[The monster grabs them]
Johnny: "winner is me!"
[The monster chortles]
Clyde: "Looks like we have to fold!"
Johnny: "man dude this creature tough as Ball's made of steel..." [holds up more cards] "...it call backup!"
[The cards reveal the High Card, the Eleven of Hearts, the Night Club, the Joker, the Strong Suit, the Eight of Spades, The Royal Flush, The Queen of Diamonds, and the Card Counter face-up. The girls arrive in the van to help]
Lori: "All right, girls, let's shuffle up and deal with this gas bag!"
[The rest of the team leap into action]
Luan: "Obviously, you're not playing with a full deck!"
[The monster notices the Joker, drops Ace and Jack, and tries to grab her, but she gets out of the way in time]
Luna: "Time to jam!" [unleashes a loud note on the monster, piercing its ears as it roars in agony]
Lola: "Time to gem!" [releases her diamonds' radiance on the monster's eyes, blinding it]
Lana: "Nothing beats a royal flush!" [opens up a hydrant and sprays water out]
Lynn: [holding up a manhole cover and reflect the water] "This water will suit you just fine!"
[The monster gets hit with the water and its face is all messed up. The Eleven of Hearts' sash snares the gaseous gossamer ghoul]
Lucy: "I really dig what you're wearing."
Leni: "It really makes your eyes pop!"
[The two of them tug on the sash extra tightly and squeeze the monster as a container comes underneath the monster's position]
Lisa: "It's time to contain this gastroenterological beast!" [presses the button that activates the container and seals the monster away as it farts one last time]
Lily: [giggles]
[The scene turns into Lisa and Lily's room. It's revealed that Lily was the cause of the so-called monster]
Johnny: "Thanks you girls and who you are? the world can breath clean more. The gas monster is gone, and baby has a fresh diaper!" [to the viewers] "once again Johnny x and he sidekick would evil raise we rising like old saying one shall stand. one shall fall"
Rita: [from downstairs] "Kids! Time to take out the trash! It's really piling up down here!"
[At that moment, Johnny holds up even more cards and turns to a new threat: a garbage monster, roaring as the gang gets ready to take on the trashy threat]
Full House Gang: "YAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!"
Loud house:FLE (test edition):Deuces Wild!
Johnny x teaming up with full house gang battling evil giant Goss monsters and saving day once more
That it another short with Johnny test

Now comments I rewritten witch 8 fan favorites season one episodes with Johnny test replace Lincoln loud and he line in full loud edition with test mode fiction.
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A boy falling in love with redhead girl.
It clichés in old time's cartoon history Young boy falling in love/having secret on redhead teenage girl they friend's or sister help them have path of courage telling secret crush how he feel about her but understand female redhead tell boy "he do to old for her" or "how about we remained friend's" the boy understand fine new love interest and moving on it little clichés but it nice see character development grow as person though the series and part of growing up you get rejected but it o.k get rejected it part of life you can find new person and get along soon you and her be couple the boy have old feeling for old crush but try to forgets about in time's and start fresh with new girl in he life and be together the girl be petty,tomboy or it not be girl it can be boy you know main character can be gay or bisexual in case and finally remember like old saying Absence is to love as wind is to fire; it extinguishes the small and enkindles the great by Comte de Bussy-Rabutin.

Timmy and Vicky (fairly odd parents)
Mac and Frankie (Foster home for imaginary friend's)
Dipper and Wendy (gravity falls)
Lincoln and Becky (loud house)
kim and ron (kim possible)
kick and scarlett (kick buttowski)
dick grayson and starfire (DC)
gwen tennyson and kevin levin (ben 10)
morty and jessica (rick and morty)
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(we open on a scene Johnny reading from one of Lincoln's manga comics; two characters are having a confrontation, and they "speak" in johnny's voice)
CHARACTER #1: "If we cannot decide who gets the triforce,then we must..."
CHARACTER #2: "BATTLE YOU FOOL!!!"
(the two characters power up and leap toward a pizza-shaped artifact and shout "YAAAHHHHHHH!!" as the caption is spelled out)
(cut to Johnny on his bed reading a manga comic)
Johnny: "Ah,it nice and I not should here but? living here with this people it nice."
RITA: (offscreen) "KIDS! PIZZA'S HERE!"
(cut to an exterior view of the house; a pizza delivery truck with a sign that says "DELIVERY IN 30 MINUTES OR ELSE" is seen driving away)

(cut to Johnny walking down the stairway)
johnny:"pizza cowabunga..."
(Johnny moves to the side of the stairway to avoid his sisters stampeding down; Lana then comes sliding down the banister)
LORI, LENI, LUNA, LOLA, LISA, LYNN, LUCY, AND LUAN: "PIZZA!!!"
LANA: "OOH, PIZZA PIZZA PIZZA, YEEES!"
Johnny: "...move I get first slice." [runs down]
(cut to a pizza box getting set down on the dining room table)
Johnny: "pizza o-right it looking good."
(Johnny opens the box to reveal a pizza pie; he and his sisters reach in and take out a slice each, leaving only one remaining)
Johnny: "With twelve slices and eleven kids,Who gets the last slice? Well, the answer is going me. you girl's don't get between me and pizza I whole get last slice of pizza just my dog Dukey."
LORI: "I'm the oldest, so I should get it!"
LOLA: "No way! Beauty before age!"
LANA: "Oh, then I guess I should get it."
LYNN: "You don't need it! You'll just eat your boogers instead!"
LANA: "Hmm, true."
LUAN: "This is bad news anyway you slice it." (laughs) "Get it?"
LILY: (blows a raspberry in response to Luan's joke)
LUCY: "I know. I'll just contact the spirits and have them decide."
LUNA: "Dude, dinner's kinda crazy with a spooky little girl like you."
LISA: "Perhaps I can use my calipers to equally measure us all a piece."
LENI: "Who needs caterpillars? All we have to do is split it evenly 40/40."
(the sisters are still arguing in the background with various speech balloons indicating random objects as if they are cursing)
Johnny: "heys Ladies you stop fight you can set this let civil humans ..."(in his imagination,johnny spins around and is enveloped in shiny rays of light; the light breaks away to reveal Johnny in an anime-esque form) "...in a fight!"
(images of fantastic anime versions of the Loud sisters appear; they shout as they circle the pizza slice and jump for it)
(cut to the exterior view of the house)
LYNN SR.: (offscreen) "KIDS! There's no need to fight!"
(cut back to the dining room; the kids, in reality, are piled on top of each other from their fight; Lynn Sr. shows them a second pizza box and opens it)
RITA: (offscreen) "We got a second pizza for free!"
Johnny: "thank Lady second whole free let to eat."
(the kids zip out of the scene, causing the one slice to drop to the floor, and go to enjoy their second pizza)
(Charles walks in, sniffs the slice and prepares to eat it, but is met with glares from Cliff, Walt and Geo; in imagination, like before, the pets assume fantastic anime forms and leap toward the slice)
Loud house FLE (test edition):Slice of Life
It :pizza:  pizza night at louds House Johnny and the sister's fighting over who get last slice of pizza who will get last pizza? Watch out for more johnny test in loud house:full loud edition.
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A pleasure to meet you! :thanks: Glad you liked "Grima's Lament"--I get a lot of feedback on that poem.
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batcartoon lila test is not a memeber of teamcourtney. i have to use characters on team courtney.
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